Love’s dream
My lover’s gaze kisses me and I blush. Longing fills my heart. My eyes wander searching for the truth. Inane banter takes meaningful form. Proud, I wear my love like a precious adornment. Time passes-a beautiful dream, flying on silvery wings. Love leaps, soaring, sparkling and drinking deeply from the spring of life.
Blind eyes fail to note that leaves have turned, dark clouds have converged. The seemingly warm cloak had been hiding the knife of treachery all the while. The poison of mistrust runs through my veins now. The weeds of indifference have overtaken the blossoms of love and I am dying a slow death under the veil of pretense.
Many hued pebbles
love, life lying threadbare
hopeless-a crushed rose
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@Zebra Crossing 
Love this!
You do?Am thrilled-was so uncertain about posting this but my friend ,Managua urged me-so I decided to:-)Thank you so much
Your information on all of the types of Haiku have been wonderful as well. Thank you so much…I’m just a Mom dipping myself into the writing world. You are giving me quite an education and it’s appreciated!
Lol,am in the same boat:-)Am a newbie too-if you have read ,my “about” you will know-am on a learning curve and beginning to enjoy the journey:-)All this info was provided by those running these challenges.Then of course there is google:-) The best way to learn is to go with the flow-join the different sites offering these challenges and participate :-)All the best!
Yes this is what I am trying to do. Thank you 🙂
:-)Soon,you will be soaring with the eagles-have faith & keep writing xx
Thank you for your encouragement 🙂
U r welcome my dear:-)
This haibun was a rollercoaster, up, then down at speed. Your prose was luscious, then suddenly hard…you cannot back-out of it anymore, it is truly superb writing. The haiku really summed it up dramatically. A very intimate read, like you’ve discovered a dark secret,all the more so as it started so light and airy. This piece DEFINITELY works best as a haibun! A comma after ‘wander’ on first line would not go amiss…
Am speechless with wonderment-am pinching myself-hard!Ouch-nope,am not dreaming 😀 Thank you -am feeling overwhelmed by such high praise Managua!Well,I thin k I am hooked now-will keep writing-good,bad or ugly 😛 And thanks for pointing out the missing pause-I should have noticed it 🙂
Enjoyed – every bit of it! Unfolding and…unfolding again until all the colours are visible and the feelings – touched. I believed, Atrayee – from the beginning to the end. B.e.a.u.t.i.f.u.l. 🙂
Ese,you are too good to me-thank you so much-I hope to keep refining my limited writing skills till someday I can proudly say “I am a writer” 🙂
Awesome Atreyee what a wonderful haibun full of strong emotions. I think you have found your life’s goal … writing haibun. You’ve done a great job on this first attempt to write a well balanced haibun. The haiku is very strong, a gem. Keep on going.
Namaste
Oh oh,am blushing now-such praise coming from you Kristhjaan-am honoured that you think so-thank you so much:-)All thanks to Managua’s gentle prodding,I attempted it-it is very ,very tough to write a Haibun and I don’t think I still have got the hang of it but as I joined Managua’s band,will keep trying.Here is the link to the Haibun I wrote for Managua’s challenge-if you have the time you can maybe read-I know you have an extremely busy schedule-I continue to marvel at your enthusiasm and passion that you manage to post such varied challenges for all of us and write and read and comment on all our posts-it is remarkable and no mean feat-so once again I salute you:-)
https://brewmeacuppa.wordpress.com/2013/11/02/a-thing-called-life-ligo-haibun/
Thank you Atreyee …
A pleasure Kristjaan:-)