Silenced

 

This is the first time I am writing for Friday Fictioneers,hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields,an amazing writer herself 🙂

THE CHALLENGE:

Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and end. (No one will be ostracized for going a few words over the count.)The following photo prompt has been provided by Douglas M Mcllroy ,for the challenge.

 

Copyright - C. Hase

Copyright – Douglas M. MacIlroy

Here is my 100 word story plus 1(for the title) 🙂

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Silenced

“EDDIE! Did you clean the pond?!”

It was always the same.

Agnes was beautiful but loved to nag. Eddie, her husband, was a gentle soul.

 Neighbours hoped that some day she would really leave Eddie and go, as she often threatened.

 Her only love- the Koi pond.

When Eddie got posted to the neighbouring town, he went alone. Neighbours understood the reason.

Soon, a man was noticed Agnes, at all hours.

Tongues wagged, when one night Agnes disappeared.

Later, they saw Eddie filling up the koi pond.

They nodded sagely, “Natural! He does not want to be reminded of Agnes.”

 

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33 thoughts on “Silenced

    • Thank you TBF:-)Will be coming by to read & comment on the endless entries(or so they seemed,lol) tonight-am forever trying to catch up on my reading,commenting,responding -writing of course,lol!

  1. Dear Atreyee,

    Welcome to Friday Fictioneers. I see you decided to dive in and get your feet wet. Glad you did. 😉

    I’m sure Eddie’s filling in the koi pond to not be reminded of Agnes. Wink wink. Doesn’t sound like anyone will miss her. Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • Hi Rochelle!So lovely to see your ;lovely comment-my apologies for the late response-am still trying to get used to this cycle of writing,reading and commenting at top speed,lol!

      Ha!ha!Yes,such reminders are bad for one’s health-the poor broken soul and yes,am sure even the neighbours must be relieved ;-)Thanks for reading and I look forward to the next one!

      Love
      Atreyee

  2. Dear Atrm61,

    (Conincidentally, that is the PIN number of my debit card.)

    In the sentence, ‘Soon, a man was noticed Agnes, at all hours.’ shouldn’t there be a word like, I don’t know, ‘boinking’ or ‘with’ between ‘noticed’ and ‘Agnes’?

    Either way, twas an excellent story so, as others have said, “Welcome to the party, pal!.” Friday Fictioneers will be the richer for your presence and your stories.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    • It is?Ah,now I can come steal all your money,lol!

      Oops!You are so right!How did I miss that?Guess when one is sleepy and trying to edit and re-edit to keep the word count intact,one should ,leave it and look at it the next morning,lol!Lesson learnt and thank you so much Doug for reading and letting me know-I appreciate it:-)And apologies for my late response-it seems I am forever playing “catch-up”-being new to this exhilarating experience,am still struggling to write,read and respond with equal impetus-so please forgive me.

      Thank you and all the others who have made me feel welcome with such lovely comments-I look forward to regular participation and reading the other submissions too:-)

      Tc & God Bless
      Atreyee

  3. Interesting challenge, and I find that I like this dark piece, especially that the neighbors aren’t quite as smart as the readers.

    • That is so sweet of you Jyothi-thank you so much-am touched and honoured!But I have been refusing the awards (I have been nominated for this award thrice)just cos I have no idea how to go about it-the whole process seems very complicated to me-no grey cells left in this brain you see,lol!

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