This is the first time I am writing for Friday Fictioneers,hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields,an amazing writer herself 🙂
THE CHALLENGE:
Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and end. (No one will be ostracized for going a few words over the count.)The following photo prompt has been provided by Douglas M Mcllroy ,for the challenge.
Copyright – Douglas M. MacIlroy
Here is my 100 word story plus 1(for the title) 🙂
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Silenced
“EDDIE! Did you clean the pond?!”
It was always the same.
Agnes was beautiful but loved to nag. Eddie, her husband, was a gentle soul.
Neighbours hoped that some day she would really leave Eddie and go, as she often threatened.
Her only love- the Koi pond.
When Eddie got posted to the neighbouring town, he went alone. Neighbours understood the reason.
Soon, a man was noticed Agnes, at all hours.
Tongues wagged, when one night Agnes disappeared.
Later, they saw Eddie filling up the koi pond.
They nodded sagely, “Natural! He does not want to be reminded of Agnes.”
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@Zebra Crossing 
Do you have the link to this contest?
http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2013/10/30/1-november-2013/
Thank you 🙂
You’re welcome 🙂
Sweet of you Al 🙂
One sec-will get back to you with the link-this is on for another two days-so you can take it easy:-)
Someone already put it there 🙂
Yes,I saw it just now:-)
Here you are:-)Happy writing!
http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/
I love this. That ending made me grin 🙂
Thank you Al-was not sure if people will get it(specially those who don’t know how my wicked,dark mind works,lol)-thus the “telling” title;-)
lol I strayed away from the darkness this week hehe I’m glad you kept it there though lol
Oh,I love dark,wicked thoughts & plots,lol!Am trying to dabble in “higher” thoughts -let me see how long I can do that 😉
I think it’s excellent 😀
Thank you for the thumbs up Al:-)
Any time 🙂
🙂
Ooh, an eerie take on the pond. Well done. Welcome to the Fictioneers. Your title is perfect.
Thank you TBF:-)Will be coming by to read & comment on the endless entries(or so they seemed,lol) tonight-am forever trying to catch up on my reading,commenting,responding -writing of course,lol!
Well done, and welcome to the party.
Thank you for the welcome Charles:-)Glad you liked it and I will be coming by tonight to read and comment on at least some pieces-including your’s:-)
Interesting tale. Wicked! 🙂
😛 Thank you-I am usually wicked,lol!
Dear Atreyee,
Welcome to Friday Fictioneers. I see you decided to dive in and get your feet wet. Glad you did. 😉
I’m sure Eddie’s filling in the koi pond to not be reminded of Agnes. Wink wink. Doesn’t sound like anyone will miss her. Good one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Hi Rochelle!So lovely to see your ;lovely comment-my apologies for the late response-am still trying to get used to this cycle of writing,reading and commenting at top speed,lol!
Ha!ha!Yes,such reminders are bad for one’s health-the poor broken soul and yes,am sure even the neighbours must be relieved ;-)Thanks for reading and I look forward to the next one!
Love
Atreyee
Dear Atrm61,
(Conincidentally, that is the PIN number of my debit card.)
In the sentence, ‘Soon, a man was noticed Agnes, at all hours.’ shouldn’t there be a word like, I don’t know, ‘boinking’ or ‘with’ between ‘noticed’ and ‘Agnes’?
Either way, twas an excellent story so, as others have said, “Welcome to the party, pal!.” Friday Fictioneers will be the richer for your presence and your stories.
Aloha,
Doug
It is?Ah,now I can come steal all your money,lol!
Oops!You are so right!How did I miss that?Guess when one is sleepy and trying to edit and re-edit to keep the word count intact,one should ,leave it and look at it the next morning,lol!Lesson learnt and thank you so much Doug for reading and letting me know-I appreciate it:-)And apologies for my late response-it seems I am forever playing “catch-up”-being new to this exhilarating experience,am still struggling to write,read and respond with equal impetus-so please forgive me.
Thank you and all the others who have made me feel welcome with such lovely comments-I look forward to regular participation and reading the other submissions too:-)
Tc & God Bless
Atreyee
Interesting challenge, and I find that I like this dark piece, especially that the neighbors aren’t quite as smart as the readers.
Ha!ha!Dumb neigbours can be a blessing at times;-)Thank you for reading Cherry:-)
There are lots of wicked, dark minds on Friday Fictioneers. We get it! Nice one. Welcome!
Ha!ha!There are?I have to find out-Sandra great to see your comment-I remember you from Trifecta:-)
You have been tagged and awarded. 🙂
http://jyothisdayout.wordpress.com/2013/11/05/the-liebster-award/
That is so sweet of you Jyothi-thank you so much-am touched and honoured!But I have been refusing the awards (I have been nominated for this award thrice)just cos I have no idea how to go about it-the whole process seems very complicated to me-no grey cells left in this brain you see,lol!