Carpe Diem-Revise that Haiku #2-Basho

Carpe Diem’s Revise that haiku #2, Basho’s famous ‘old pond’

 

At Carpe Diem,our host Kristjaan has set us a tough challenge for this episode of “revise the Haiku”.This is what he has to say-

 

In this episode of ‘revise that haiku’ I love to challenge you to revise Basho’s famous ‘old pond’ haiku.”

furu ike ya / kawazu tobi komu / mizu no oto

old pond
a frog jumps into
the sound of water

Here are my feeble attempts at revising this Haiku .

 

shattering
the sound of silence
a frog jumps

By the pond
all silent-till a
frog plops in

Hermitage-
a frog in the pond
spring knocking

Roses bloom,
pond silent,startled
by frog’s leap

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4 thoughts on “Carpe Diem-Revise that Haiku #2-Basho

    • Oh-that is so ,so lovely to read Kristjaan-am so happy I am learning to do better:-)Thank you so much-without your constant feedback and encouragement it wouldn’t have been possible.

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