Friday Fictioneers
Friday has come and gone (in my part of the world at least) and I have not yet made my entry on FF,where every week our fantastic host Rochelle Wisoff-Fields reels in over 100 writers from all over the globe to spin their magic with the photo prompt provided,in around 100 words.For more details,please click on this – http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/friday-fictioneers-2/
This week I was afraid I may miss entering as my brother and his family are visiting.With tons of fun,cooking ,cleaning and outings,hardly any time left to catch the escaped muse,which seizing it’s chance has gone on a vacation.But as all FF writers will admit,we loathe to miss getting our weekly fix ,so here is my 100 word tale(sorry if it is insipid) following this week’s photo prompt,provided by none other than the very talented and versatile Adam Ickes-thank you Adam:-)I also hope that my friends and readers will understand if I am late this week in catching up with the reading and responding.
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Do not disturb
This is beautiful!
Knew you would like it buttercup.
What a view!
Wait till night falls-it is spectacular.
Why is it so deserted?
The locals say the bridge is cursed.
How?
People disappear.
Great! Now kiss me and let us disappear too.
Good idea, come closer.
Umm…
Ouch!
What happened?
Something bit my leg.
Let me see…
Jon, I am scared.
Something is not right.
What’s that slithering noise?
Let’s not wait. Run!
Unseen, the inky black creatures emerged from under the bridge and sinking their sharp teeth into the fleeing ankles, dragged them into the water.
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@Zebra Crossing 
Why oh why do people ignore warnings and then complain after they get dragged away? Seriously that was REALLY scary! 🙂
Ha!ha!Some people never listen and thank God-we get to write about them ;-)Thanks a ton for reading and the comment Sarah 🙂
Dear Atreyee,
That would explain a lot. Pity they won’t be around to warn anyone else. Well done in a creepy kind of way. 😉
Shalom,
Rochelle
He!he!So true-thank you Rochelle for the fun comment-I was not very pleased with the final product this week but no way I wanted to miss it 😀
It’s time to put signs up on this bridge. Nice story!
:-)Thank you TGN
You just never know which bridges are safe to walk.
So true;-)Thanks a ton Phyllis
Beware of trolls, or whatever those things are. What a shift in direction your story took. Hope you have a good time with your brother and his family. Ron
Am glad you noted that-yes,those critters are evil ;-)Thanks Ron for the lovely comment and wishes-yes,enjoying a lot-they will be leaving day after tomorrow-then back to routine-today I am a bit free-so playing catch up:-)
goes to show how important it is to think carefully about what we wish for…great story and enjoy for family get together. 🙂
Thank you dear friend both for the comment and for the wishes-yes am enjoying-they will be here till Tuesday-so almost end of fun time-good times fly away too soon,no? 🙂
Oh Atreyee something dark and sinister in this one. Very well done my friend.
Thank you so much Michael -was not pleased with this one-so doubly pleased that you like it:-)
oh, where’s the happy ending? 😦
Ha!ha!It was eaten away ;-)Thank you for stopping by to read & for the fun comment Plaridel:-)
You do relish those creepy stories! Wow, really grabbed me.
He!he!You got me there-I do-if I write something without that factor,all my regular readers,including my daughter ,feel a little let down and once a dear friend even asked me if I was losing my touch ,lol!Thank you for coming by to read and comment:-)
Oh I love the when it’s a happy ending… for the famished monster family.. at least it’s another couple that will never reproduce… proving Darwin was correct…survival of the fittest.
Ha!ha!Bjorn,I think your comment would have got more “likes” than my story if we were to post this on FB 😀 I am still laughing-thanks buddy!
Wow, this is a fantastic idea! I love the idea of people disappearing once they cross the bridge. So much could be done with that one. Really cool. Nice job on this, Atreyee. I’m glad you were able to sneak in FF for this week. This is a goodie!
Aww Amy,you are so kind-your comment made me grin for as I said in the intro,I was not very happy with this one but this week,it had to do-luckily I am able to catch up today as my brother had some social commitment -so they will be back only at lunch-so using my free time “judiciously”,lol!Thanks a ton for your warm compliments-you made my day 😀
Really, this is a great one! If you’re inspired, I think your idea has a lot of promise and you should extend it. It’s so good, I want it! Enjoy your free time. You’re most welcome, Atreyee! It’s my pleasure.
Thank you Amy-you are very kind:-)At the moment,I struggle to meet all my challenge deadlines but maybe someday I will try to extend all these little “nuggets” into a longer story 😀
I guess it wasn’t just a superstition after all!
Yes,but as is with folklore,people tend to ignore till it is too late 😉 Thank you so much for stopping by and for the comment 🙂
Indeed. You’re welcome!
🙂
You built up the tension in that story to horrific heights, Atreyee. Well done.
Oh Karen,so glad you thought so-thank you so much 🙂
Hmmm, perhaps Jon is in on it…? I guess that’s one way to end a relationship. 🙂
In all sincerity, this was a wonderful piece. Amazing job at building suspense!
Ha!ha!Had he not been pulled down too,I would have gone with that one for sure ;-)Thank you so much for coming by and for your comment which made me laugh and smile,Adelie 😀
Delightfully horrible! Great job! 🙂
😀 What a lovely comment Judah-thanks a ton
I guess inky black creatures need to eat too!
Great creepy story 🙂
Ha!ha!DR ,so true and if dinner is served so alluringly,why not;-) Thanks buddy for stopping by to read and comment:-)
Oh! I didn’t see it coming. Great way to end the story!
Thank you 🙂
the sudden twist was like a tentacle grabbing my ankle! 🙂
Now,that would have terrified me too much even to run Kz 😉 Thanks for stopping by-how is your book coming?Have been so busy that had no time to check but am sure it will sell like hotcakes 😀
Couple? Sounds like a ‘Eat one get one free’ deal.
Ha!ha!Thanks Subroto for that fun comment:-)
It’s one thing to disappear and quite another to disappear with inky black things attached to your ankles–Yuck.
Lol-thanks Vb-and I agree 🙂
Glad you could make it. I had to check my ankles to be sure I was OK.
janet
Ha!ha!Janet!Thanks a ton 🙂
Dear Atreyee, WOW – creepy and very well written story – felt a lot longer. I don’t like slithering anythings! You really are good! Nan
What a lovely compliment Nan,thank you so much:-)
Ouch…
This is scary… 😦
Well done!
Thank you Satya:-)
They say be careful what you wish for. But oh how I wished they had gotten away! 🙂 Well done!
Me too but those critters were too sly ;-)Thanks Celestine for stopping by to read ad comment:-)
Trust you to turn a nice little romantic walk into a tale of horror and woe. 😉
Hope you had a good time with your family and didn’t have to do too much cooking, cleaning etc. 🙂
Ha!ha!Sarah,you always make me laugh-thank you my friend.Yes,it was nice but you guessed right-too much work for lazy,unused to me,lol!Slept for along time and still feeling a lil groggy 😛
Yes, we depend on those people who won’t listen for the tales of horror and suspense. Good story, and your vivid descriptions made it really scary.
So true;-)Thank you Patricia for stopping by to read and comment:-)
Aaack! That was worse than haunting. Seriously, give me a ghost over anything that slithers any day! Hope you’ve enjoyed your family time 🙂
Janna,you always make me laugh with your cute comments-can’t tell you how I look forward to seeing your feedback:D Yes,it was good though very tiring-will write to you tonight-am off to make some snacks for hubby dear-then will post my entries to FF,WOE and SE-can’t wait to read your entries too 🙂
That bridge is causing all sorts of problems for us FF folks! People are jumping off, being dragged off, proposing marriage on it, encountering aliens at the end of it. Well done. Great story, clearly written. I’d like to read more about thos inky creatures. My cat bites my ankles when I try to leave the house, so it might be her, though she’s not as black as your creatures. As a bit of concrit, I might edit this to contract ‘it is’ to ‘it’s’ and ‘let us’ to ‘let’s’ 🙂
ROFL Ann-you are so right-the bridge def is a trouble maker:-)Your cat,.on the other hand,seems quite a handful ;-)Thanks for the concrit-will edit it as soon as I have some free time later this week-highly appreciated:-)
My cat opens doors. And once, when we were living in Paris, she locked my husband and I out of our apartment by flicking the security bar into place with her paw after we left. It took us an hour to get back in and if we hadn’t succeeded, it would have cost a couple of hundred Euros to get an emergency locksmith on the job! She won’t use her catflap though and we keep it permanently locked. One night, after visiting friends, we returned to find her outside, having managed to undo the lock on the flap! I think she was a burglar in a previous life. Don’t reply to this. I talk too much. Ann
Ha!ha!Sorry to be responding inspite of your warning Ann-reminds me of stories I have heard from my hubby-my mom-in-law was a cat and dog person and had 19 cats and 8 dogs-all stray-putting up with her,lol!And,yes,i am garrulous too 😛
Wow! 19 cats and 8 dogs. I though my mother was bad. She ‘peaked’ at 6 dogs and 2 cats, all pedigree. 🙂
I am not a cat & dog(or animal person) but my daughter is-so I do not understand this love ,lol!Even my Mom was a cat person-though she even liked mice &snakes-yikes!
I like mice and snakes. I like all creatures, though I’m aware that some think of me as food rather than friend (including some humans). 🙂
Aaah geez, and they seemed so happy!
Hee!Hee!Thank you Dawn for the cute comment-gald to see you:-)
*glad