Carpe Diem-Revise that Haiku #2-Basho

Carpe Diem’s Revise that haiku #2, Basho’s famous ‘old pond’

 

At Carpe Diem,our host Kristjaan has set us a tough challenge for this episode of “revise the Haiku”.This is what he has to say-

 

In this episode of ‘revise that haiku’ I love to challenge you to revise Basho’s famous ‘old pond’ haiku.”

furu ike ya / kawazu tobi komu / mizu no oto

old pond
a frog jumps into
the sound of water

Here are my feeble attempts at revising this Haiku .

 

shattering
the sound of silence
a frog jumps

By the pond
all silent-till a
frog plops in

Hermitage-
a frog in the pond
spring knocking

Roses bloom,
pond silent,startled
by frog’s leap

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Carpe Diem’s Tan Renga challenge # 15

Carpe Diem’s Tan Renga Challenge #15, Managua Gunn’s “Cricket’s last song”

 

This week’s Tan Renga Challenge starts with a haiku written by Managua Gunn from “Coffee with Yer Pirate”.

 The haiku by Managua Gunn, is  about a prostitute.The task of this Tan Renga Challenge is to complete the first stanza with a second stanza with 7-7 syllables. So our first stanza of the new Tan Renga Challenge is:

First stanza (5-7-5):

Cricket’s last song
even the prostitute hears –
stops waving her fan                                            (Managua Gunn)

 

Second stanza (7-7):

monotony of business
broken by it’s farewell call                                    (Atreyee)

 

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