Carpe Diem -Back to it’s roots #3 “Waka”

CARPE DIEM GOES BACK TO IT’S ROOTS #3 ”WAKA”

 

At CD,our dear host Kristjaan has come up with a real tough challenge this time.This is what he says-

The goal of this episode of Carpe Diem’s Goes Back to It’s Roots is to choose a waka, you can find a lot of them on the Internet, and re-do that waka into a haiku. The haiku has to follow the classical rules as there are:

  1. 5-7-5 syllables
  2. a moment as short as the sound of a pebble thrown into water
  3. a keriji or cuttingword
  4. a kigo or seasonword
  5. the poet him/herself is not present in the haiku
  6. and objectivity ” 

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I have chosen the following waka to rewrite as a Haiku.

Love (3) KKS 656. Komachi.
  utsutsu ni wa In the waking world
  sa mo koso arame you must, I suppose, take care,
  yume ni sae but how it pains me
  hitome o moru to that you should keep out of sight
  miru ga wabishisa even in the realm of dreams.

 

My revised Haiku-

Separate lives lived
autumn’s glow brings no warmth
in dreams- of winter

(Atreyee)

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Carpe Diem-Tan Renga challenge # XX

Carpe Diem’s Tan Renga Challenge Month #XX, WabiSabi’s ”old beacon”

 

At CD,our host Kristjaan has set the challenge for today’s TanRenga with this amazing Haiku by Wabi Sabi.

 

old beacon
hailing all strangers –
mind the land

(c) WabiSabi

And here is my completion:-)

sweet siren song beckoning
sailors leap embracing death

(Atreyee)

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Carpe Diem-Tan renga

Carpe Diem’s Tan Renga Challenge #20, Joanne’s “Autumn Leaves”

 

At Carpe Diem, this week’s Tan Renga Challenge is started with a haiku by Joanne of 4Joy. She wrote it in response on Garry Gay’s 4th Special and it’s a stunning haiku. The goal is to write the second stanza (7-7) to this Tan Renga started by Joanne. 

Stanza 1 (5-7-5):

autumn leaves
myriad shades red and gold
begin to fall as snow                                   (Joanne)
 
Stanza 2 (7-7):
 

saddles her winter horses
snow flakes ,frost and hail follow                  (Atreyee)

 

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