Carpe Diem’s Tanka Shrine #2

Carpe Diem’s Tanka Shrine #2, Ishikawa Takuboku’s ”on the white sand”


For this episode ,Kristjaan,our host at Carpe Diem has chosen a Tanka by Ishikawa Takuboku.

On the white sand
Of the beach of a small isle
In the Eastern Sea
I, my face streaked with tears,
Am playing with a crab
(c) Ishikawa Takuboku
The challenge is to write a new Tanka in the same tone, sense and spirit as Ishikawa.
This I found to be be very tough.However,here is my feeble attempt at writing a Tanka in the same spirit.

Drinking deeply from
the chalice of life,we cough
choke,even throw up
but love helps us breathe again
in this wilderness of pain