Its time to submit my piece for Friday Fictioneers. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is the wonderful host for this site and every Friday ,around 100 fellow bloggers submit their 100 word stories based on the photo prompt of that week.
THE CHALLENGE:
Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and end. (No one will be ostracized for going a few words over the count.)
Copyright – Ted Strutz
Here are my 101 words(including the title).
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Retribution
She watched them board the ferry.
The bitch with him was pregnant and he looked happy.
Her face darkened.
He had said he was going to be with his dying mother.
The lying bastard!
Well, she was going to see to it that someone died!
At the busy hospital, no one noticed the mousey intern.
On Thanksgiving Day, the woman delivered a baby boy.
That night, the intern offered to work extra hours in the neo-natal ward.
It was the last time anyone saw her or the baby.
Next morning, the woman was found strangled to death-in her hospital bed.
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@Zebra Crossing 
Dear Atreyee,
Hell hath no fury like an intern scorned.
Aloha,
Doug
Glad you think so,he!he!Thank you for coming by to read and comment,Doug:-)
Dear Atreyee,
Guess he cheated on the wrong intern. Quite a story.
shalom,
Rochelle
Ha!ha!Must be-thanks for reading and the lovely comment Rochelle:-)
Quite a story, friend.
Thanks YS -was not very pleased with it but at least I wrote it,lol!
Gruesome! I hope at least, for the baby’s sake, she is kind to him.
Thanks MissTiffany for coming by to read and comment:-)Yes,she did take care of the baby as her own cos all her anger was towards the man who betrayed her 🙂
You’re welcome! Good. 🙂
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Vengeance – in spades! I was anxious from the very start.
Lol!Thank you Sandra-guess you know my style 😉
Atreyee, this is one really ‘big’ scorned woman! The story hooked me! 🙂
Ha!ha!I like that readinpleasure-thanks my dear:-)
Toodles, indeed, Atreyee! The bitch with him was pregnant and he looked happy. I liked this line. Then came this one… Her face darkened... Good stuff!
Your comment made me grin Ted-thanks a ton:)
All very grim Atreyee, but hell hath no fury, and all that, which I know well……good one.
Ha!ha!So true-at least in fiction;-)Thks Summer for coming by to read and comment-woe is me-am so behind in everything-again,sigh!
Wow, what sickness and hatred in 100 words.
😛 oops-sorry I have a wicked mind,lol!Thanks for coming by to read and comment Dawn 🙂
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Gee, that was really ghastly. Not much to redeem your story. I think you need to tone it down a bit. Most of the offerings, even when grim, have a touch of humour to lighten the story.
Maybe but life is grim-if you don’t believe me,just look around-the news channels,the newspapers-everywhere-it is the same-sad but true and hey,not everyone can write light hearted stories,no?Thanks for coming by to read and for your kind comment;-)
This was a really cold and calculating ‘murderous’ plot….. How does someone as nice as you think of such things lol Diane
Ha!ha!You know my dark mind-it outweighs my tiny “nicer” side ;-)Thks Diane xx
Ooh, that was really dark!
I love the way you make us feel all shocked and then underneath sign off with “Toodles…” 🙂
Ha!ha!And I loved your comment:-)Thanks so much for coming by
Indeed… this was very dark… shiver… (but who am I to say?)…hmmm
lol!Thanks Bjorn-will try to keep it lighter next time around 😉
Not for me really… I try to stay on the sinister side myself
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oh no, the poor baby!!! pure evil. sad to say, humans are capable of this and much much worse. (all that, then, “Toodles…”) hahaha
Ha!ha!Kz-not you too(toodles-now I will never look at my signature in the same “taken for granted” light 😛 )-thanks a ton-yes,sad but true-real life is actually more sinister and dark than our fictional tales
Scary indeed, what a revenge.
😛 I know-possibly I over did it
My daughter would love it.
A girl after my own heart then ;-)How old is she-mine will be 18 coming Feb:-)
She is 40 and loves ‘Dexter’ and horror movies. Writes insane ghost stories .
Oh my-does she have a blog or writes books?Would love to read her stories-when I was expecting my daughter,my mom was horrified to find ghost stories and murder mysteries under my pillow,when she came visiting,lol!Guess that’;s why my daughter us also like me-loves horror and murder mysteries and ofc ghost stories and yep,she is my sounding board and a writer in the making:-)
She writes blog- http://somkritya.wordpress.com/2013/08/23/greatest-story-ever-told-is-on-another-shelf
She forced me to join word press , I’m learning.
Am so glad she did and you are doing a great job:-)I am learning too-am very new to all this and am still finding my feet-or should I say fingers?;-)Will be reading your daughter’s stories-give my love to her xx
Hey! You write very well . Learning new things is always fun, I’m grateful to word press, I’m learning photography also. Where do you live?
Thanks,yes it is fun to learn nw things:-) I just saw your daughter’s pic-she is gorgeous and apparently a very loved celebrity too-am yet to ascertain the nitty gritty :-)Am pleasantly surprised to see that she and I share the same surname 😀 Am at Kolkata-what about you?
I’m in Visakhapatnam. So we are all mukherjees. Nice to know you. I asked because its 1.29 AM and you are still awake?
Oh I visited Vizag way back in 2005 when I was based in Hyd and in June this year passed it on my way to Hyd:-)Yes,we all are Mukkhuje’s ;-)Great to connect like this!Re the late hours-well I have always been a nite owl-earlier it used to be books -since the last decade or so it has been the net-my usual bed time is 3.30-4a.m-terrible no?I tell myself I will change-do it for two days-i mean go to bed at 2 or so but then again I slip,lol!What about you?It is late for you too,no?
I am also a night bird. Love to do things at night when its calm and lonely. Now I suffer from insomnia but refuse to take sleeping pills daily.Some day I sleep at 5 Am. We two live alone so its okay but at what time do you get up? Take care ,
Oh insomnia is bad-i suffered from that for a short time-abt 4 months when my mom was diagnosed with cancer but like you refused to take meds-and it went away on its own.Oh I get up around 8 or so ,make my hubby’s bf & tiffin and once he leaves at 8.45 I go bk to sleep-my daughter who just started college has different timings-some days 9a,m ,some days a little later-so we adjust-i catch up on extra two hours or so in the mornings and once a week i sleep at a stretch-usually it does the trick but when I tend to overdo,i get migraines-then am forced to sleep,lol!U take care too-will catch up with you again tomorrow-will read some more of your writings too:-)lots of love
Lots of love and hugs dear. Good night or morning?
Ha!HA!It is still night for me,my dear-thanks and wish you a good ning 😉
Photography?Wow!One of my dreams to learn that and graphic designing:-)
Distinctly dark… wow! Clearly, the wrong woman was betrayed. 😉
Thank you :-)Yes,she was-possibly that other woman was a real you know..;-)