Their snake eyes crawled over me .I recoiled. Their filthy minds probed into my very core, hungry maggots devouring my very essence. I flinched. Finally, they tore into my nubile body, leeching the last vestiges of consciousness from my blanched, ravaged soul.
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This is my response to this week’s ultimate question at Gargleblaster #161. The challenge was to answer the ultimate question, “Is something crawling on me?” in exactly 42 words. What a coincidence ‘cos I have been fighting a skin rash for the past few days but managed to keep my itchy hands at bay while writing,lol! If you are interested in joining the fun or read what other participants have written, click on the url http://yeahwrite.me/yeah-write-161-weekly-writing-challenge-gargleblaster-challenge-open/
What an intense description!
Thank you Marcy 🙂
Sad that!
If you like , please vote for my story,http://tlng.me/1fhAn8H
:-)Thanks
It took ages for the pages to load but I managed-and voted for you 🙂
Oh! Thanks for the effort and time…much appreciated…
🙂
:-)You are welcome-hope you win
Thanks for ur kind support….but that’s a global platform….I will need a lot of votes to win…so I don’t think I would…I am just sharing with some of my friends whom I think may read it ..that’s all.. 🙂
That’s fine-winning is just an extra perk 🙂
By the way I removed my entry, as they will own our works uploaded there…that site is not very good to play I think…I checked only when a friend told…
Oh I see 🙂
Very nice! Too bad maggots can’t wait until you’re dead. Rotting flesh makes them appear.
Thanks but here they are different kinds of maggots-the (in)human kind 😛
Literally very good.
Thank you YS:-)How have you been-I missed a lot of action-reading,writing,commenting ETAL due to ill health and real life-limping back to some kind of normalcy-I hope 😛
I wish you complete recovery soon. 🙂
Thank you my friend:-)
Intense and powerful Atreyee :). Glad to see you back, dear. Missed your words.
Thank you dear R-was down with a lot of health issues and other things-am better now and hopefully will be able to participate in a few challenges 🙂
Oh dear, hope you are feeling better now, looking forward to read your words 🙂
The rash is almost gone but other health issues need to be addressed-kal ja rahi hoon Doc ke paas-dekho kya hot hai-btw is baar tumhare post par mohar lagi hai-umeed hai ki top saat me tumhara naam bhi chamkega 🙂
Just sent an email. 🙂
Will check in ten minutes-am off to post my SE entry:-)
Yay! So glad to see you back! Now this was celebration of feelings in words. Wonderful, Atreyee! Absolutely loved it. I hope you feel better soon!
Thank you Archita-glad to note I was missed and hoping to bounce back soon:-)
Now that is what I call a bad day. Good write.
Ha!ha!Thank you Anne-your comment made my day 🙂
Shudder! very descriptive!
Thank you so much 🙂
Thank you so much 🙂
It’s lovely to see you back, Atreyee. I missed you. Your short short is chillingly well done. I have to shake those images out of my head.
Thank you Gina-so lovely to see your comment-you always manage to add a silver lining to my dark clouds 😀 Am still fighting some health issues-so much back log on catching up with reading and commenting-writing is also so slow 😛
Atreyee, the imagery here is incredible. I loved the maggot line. Karen
Aww,thanks Karen-coming from such an accomplished writer like you,I take it as a huge compliment! Btw,your’s was too funny-got my vote 🙂
I could feel your words creeping and crawling over me. Such an exquisite take on the prompt.
Thank you Renada-your high praise made my day! 🙂
From their eyes to your soul – whoa! I don’t know how you get any sleep at night, Atreyee!
Lol Kymm,I guess I don’t -no wonder I sleep half the day too 😛 Thanks a ton for making me grin 😀
I especially like “their filthy minds.” Great post!
Thank you 🙂
Wow you said a lot here in such a short amount of time. Captured the mood intensely!
Thank you so much Jen 🙂
Intense and powerful are two words I kept seeing in other comments – they perfectly describe what I thought when I read this. I don’t have a rash, but man, the urge to scratch and run away squealing is strong 🙂
Ha!ha!I know that 😉
I’m always so happy when I see your name on a grid! I’m itching through this whole thing so your words did the trick!,,
😀 Thank you Gina
Yikes! Freaky. Well written, and a little scary!
Thank you Tina 🙂
What a horrible way to go… hope you are feeling better these days…Diane
Thank you Diane :-)No,not really-had to see the DOc today but was too unwell-will mail you once i see him tomorrow.
You are not well… my best wishes for wellness soon.
Thank you Ted-wishes mean a lot-Doc is happy with the progress I am making though as I had suspected my thyroid prob has reshaped itself into Hashimoto’s disease-Doc seemed upbeat as it seems my “bubbly” personality will see me through,lol!Well,let us see what the test reports say when I see him next in July 🙂
Good God, Atreyee, you don’t pull any punches! This is the only Gargleblaster I have read… I’m not sure i want to read any more!
More laughter from me!Ted,am floored by your comment -thanks a ton but do read the other entries-they are not all this bad and I do look forward to your entry next week:-)