Friday Fictioneers
Yay!Finally it is Wednesday!So what is so great about it you say?Ah,but unless you are a FF junkie like me and have missed a week for any reason-mine being ill-health-you would not understand 🙂 You see our wonderful hostess with the mostest,lovely and super talented writer Rochelle has created a magical world for flash fiction writers at FF.Every week,over hundred writers from around the globe,hop,skip and jump to weave 100 word tales based on a photo prompt.If you are a story teller too or love to read stories,do check this cool site by clicking on this URL http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/friday-fictioneers-2/ .I promise you will be hooked forever:-)
This week, the photo is by DLovering and my 101 words,including the title follow the photo.
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The promise
Last minute decorations were being added.
Excitement permeated the wedding venue.
The Bride felt nothing except anxiety.
She loved another.
The bridegroom arrived amid loud fanfare.
Everyone rushed to welcome them.
The Bride clutched the phial of poison tightly. He had promised…
Suddenly the gaiety was disrupted by a band of masked men on horses.
They fired.
Bandits!!
People screamed.
The gang leader scooped the bride up on his horse.
As they rode across the border, the bride hugged the Bandit.
“I was so afraid.”
“You needn’t have. I never break a promise,” replied her lover, hugging her back.
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@Zebra Crossing 
Cute and sweet story! Glad she got her happy ending!
Thank you Hala :-)Will come by to read your entry and others after tea:-)
Reminds me of one of the old daaku movies. Superbly crafted.
Aha!You got it right my friend-the scene immediately flashed on the screen of my mind when I saw the photo prompt-so like our gaons,no?Maine to “bandits” ki jagah “dacoits” bhi likha tha aur gaon bhi mention kiya tha-words kam kiye to change kar diya,lol!Thanks YS ,feels good to be back:-)Will go and check the links-hopefully you have posted yours already
Actually damn good, Atreyee.
Yet to think up a plot. Right now working on six on the sixth. 🙂
Wow-6th?I can never think so much-still a long way to become as seasoned as you:-)Will look forward to reading yours-time to go prepare dinner now-sigh!
Hardly 🙂
I do not think I am good at it ………. just give it a try.
You are to modest my friend!
🙂
Good story with a great romantic ending. Well done. 🙂
Thank you Dear Patricia-I just started reading-will get to yours if you have posted:-)
I could visualize this as a great silent black-and-white movie… yes I can see that final take.. the kiss, the setting sun…
😀 trust you to add more colour to my simple story than I could ever imagine Bjorn-thanks a ton my friend!
Zebe, there’s an old Mexican custom like that even in use today (must have gotten it from the Spanish). I like this because it has the very flavor of the Latin culture. You captured it perfectly.
¡Viva a los novios! Y la historia es ¡brillante! (Long live the couple and the story is brilliant).
Oh my,really?Just goes to show truth is not so far from fiction and vice-versa! I did have a Spanish “Bandit”(Zorro?)in mind when the so called abduction took place ;-)I guess the world is really not so big as we like to think,eh?Thank you so much for stopping by and for leaving this uplifting comment Wmq 🙂
Atreyee
Awesome story, Atreyee. I’m a sucker for romance with a happy ending.
You are such a sweetheart Gina-thank you my dear:-)
My pleasure.
🙂
What a lucky girl. One does not always end up with the handsome prince.
Ha!ha!Yes,that is true:-)Thank you Alicia for coming by to read and comment.
Saved! 🙂 Nice.
😀 Thank you Judah
Very romantic, I could picture it.
Thank you Sandra:-)
I can see this as a Bollywood movie (and maybe I already have, who knows?) I hope she disposes of the poison properly. 🙂
janet
:-)Thank you Janet and not to worry,she threw the poison away-she had just kept !t in case her lover failed to rescue her from that unwanted marriage-now,no more poison-only ambrosia -of love!Ha!ha!
Oh my, this is a scene from a movie. Excellent!
Thank you-glad it felt like one 🙂
Oh you romantic you!
😀 Thank you Hamish
Dear Atreyee,
Romantic story with lots of swash and buckle. Glad the hero arrived just in time. Sweet.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you so much Rochelle:-)
Am wondering if you missed my two comments on your post,Rochelle-its the first time I have not received any response on that-you are so conscientious and attentive always,that I am puzzled at the omission and wondering if I offended you somehow?If I have,I apologize 😦
Dear Atreyee,
No excuses from me. It’s I who needs to apologize. You certainly have done nothing to offend me.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Phew!Am so relieved 😀 Thank you so much Rochelle 🙂
Now that’s a satisfying romance story, Atreyee. The poison served its purpose to frighten us and I’m glad you clarified what happened to it eventually.
:-)Thank you Karen
Hmmm..dakus and goris…..kitne aadmi they?
4 sarkar! 😀 Thanks Subroto
A dash of romance… being whisked away by a bandit on horseback…. what happened with the poison though…. did she use it? Always a touch of ‘murder’… at least almost….p.s. you were going to email me … ?? no need though if you’d rather not… Diane
Hi Diane!My apologies-my net went down for 3 days and now with WP changing its look I don’t know if I am coming or going-after a struggle of few hours I can finally see the notifications-can you please give me your email id once again-will definitely mail you.
Ha!ha!Seems my readers are too used to my murderous ways-no this time the poison was for her own use in case her lover failed to arrive-she had no wish to marry the other fellow-she threw it away once she was “rescued” 🙂
I’m glad she gets to ride away to freedom and love.. lol
My email is writerwannabe232@hotmail.com Diane
😀 Thanks Hun-expect a mail from me tonight:-)
did the bandits shoot the groom, or will they be on the run from him from now on?
Fun story! Your formatting raised the tension.
No,they did not believe in shedding blood-their guns frightened the wedding guests and groom enough 😉 Thank you El,so pleased that you enjoyed my little story:-)
Aw, a sweet romance where everyone lived! (all happily ever after, except maybe the almost-groom 🙂 ) That’s a curious photo and I like the story you conjured using it for the setting.
😀 Thank you sweetie
about two lines before the end, i had a feeling….. well done. at first, i thought it was going in a romeo and juliet direction. happy to be wrong.
Yes,in retrospect I see that you are right’t be surprised at that of cpourse,lol!-it did seem like that but am glad you liked the end, Rich :-)Thank you so much.Apologies for the delayed reply-was unwell and just came back last night to catch up with the reading and commenting-still have about 25 more to read unless in the last 8 hours ,more entries have been added-won
no need to apologize
Egads! Just realized my response had been full of typos 😛
nobody is counting. yet.
Ha!ha!Thank God for small mercies 😉
An exciting tale of love and betrayal. Should I feel a little sorry for the groom? I kind of do, unless he was a bad guy. I wonder, was she going to kill him or herself or both? I’m glad it had half a happy ending, at least for her and her lover. 🙂
Thanks so much Lisa:-)Yes,poor groom-I agree with you Lisa-I too felt sorry-had I had more words I would have added an Indian touch-that he was marrying her for the rich dowry she was bringing and thus make him not so likeable;-)She meant to kill herself with that poison in case she was forced to marry the guy and her lover failed to appear as promised.
Altreyee, we both went with wedding stories, but your’s has a lot more action and adventure! Nice job.
Thank you my friend -great minds,eh? 😉 I liked yours much better 🙂
Aww, you are too kind! Thanks Altreyee. 😉
🙂 xx
enjoyed the story. i love happy endings. 🙂
Thank you so much Plaridel:-)
How romantic! LOVE IT! Good story and I do love a happy ending! Bandits – very clever! Nan 🙂
Thank you Nan-yes I love happy endings too though they are rare in my stories,lol!
Melodrama! Just love it. Every woman’s dream?
Ha!ha!Patrick,no,not every woman’s but maybe many dream to elope with their love ;-)Thanks for stopping by 🙂
aww reminds me a lot of the romance novels that i used to read!…. bandits, brides…. really nice 🙂
Ha!ha!KZ,you are so right-those racy books,aha!Thanks a ton for stopping by:-)What’s the recent update on your book?Am dying to read it
it’s currently with the author who will write a blurb… can i interest you in an advanced review copy? you’ll get it ahead of others and it’s free, in exchange for a review on Amazon or Smashwords and Goodreads (wherever you feel most comfortable) Let me know. you can email me at crazyaboutmiumiu2@yahoo.com or even send me a message thru my FB page 🙂 thanks so much! xo
Sure-will mail you tomorrow KZ-thanks so much xx 🙂
yay! please do. thanks a lot 🙂 🙂
🙂
hi. were you able to download it? 🙂 i also sent a link for the downloadable epub reader, in case your pc doesn’t have one installed. sorry for the bother…
Hi Kz,I haven’t yet chkd the mail but will do so later in the day-thank you so much for all the help-so sorry to be such an inconvenience to you.I hope to start reading it tonight-am so excited 🙂
it’s perfectly fine! let me know if you encounter any other problems. 🙂 and thanks again for agreeing to review the book 🙂
Hey,its an honour and a pleasure Kz:-)
Ooh, if he hadn’t turned up, I wonder if the poison was meant for her or the prospective husband 🙂
Thank you DR -the poison was meant for suicide in case her lover failed to turn up as promised:-)
I love a happy ending. You had me worried for a moment with that poison – I’m very glad she didn’t have to use it on the groom 🙂
Ha!ha!Sarah-no the poison was not meant for the hapless groom at all-she meant to take it in case her paramour failed to arrive on time-an escape:-)Thanks so much for stopping by to read and comment
My heartbeat hastened when I read the line about the poison. So glad she didn’t have to use it. Seems a white knight arrived to save the day. We will always long for the bad boys won’t we?
Ha!ha!So true-thanks so much for coming by to read and comment 🙂
You’re very welcome dear.
🙂
Ah–a Zoro-esque hero and a happy ending. The phial of poison had me nervous. Cute tale although it’s been told before. To draw readers in at the beginning, I would recommend incorporating action right away instead of simply telling what is happening. You could even leave more room for the action or the romance instead of setting the stage that we could have seen without that first line.
I wish these adventuring lovers all the best.
Kind regards,
Marie Gail
Yep,charged as guilty Marie :-)Thank you so much for coming by to read and give a detailed feedback-I really appreciate it.You know I have been trying to do what you have rightly pointed out but failing miserably-that English is my third language is not helping either.Could you be a sweetie and rewrite this in “show,don’t tell” format as you have pointed out-maybe I will get an idea and can try it next time?However, if you are too busy to take time out ,I will understand-thank you again and hopefully with time and with a little help from well meaning friends who know the art ,I will improve 🙂
Sure. Will you shoot me an email with the text of the story? I have to admit that you do very well writing in English. I didn’t realize it wasn’t your first language. 🙂
My email addy is mariegail.stratford@gmail.com.
It is a busy week for me, so it might take me a couple days to get back to you. But if you send the email and don’t hear back by the end of the week, just shoot me a friendly reminder.
All my best,
Marie Gail
Aww,you are so sweet Marie,thanks a ton-will do that for sure and will look forward to the pointers ,love xx
Done!
now that was quick and easy. 🙂 love the happy ending for the bride but poor stood up groom.
Thank you dear Sun:-)
Well for once loving the badboy was a good thing. I love a little romance but it is even better with adventure and action. This was a fun read Altreyee.
Thank you so much Dana 🙂
A wonderful romance! I was worried when she had the poison- my mind switched to Romeo and Juliet, and I felt we were headed for tragedy. The way you wrote this just made it so easy to visualize, and the scene with the bandits was intense. I loved the happy ending and am glad you tapped into the sweetheart within you! 😀
Aww,thank you for the sweet and supportive comment Adelie-am still learning :-)The poison was intended for herself but when her lover arrived,she did not need it anymore-so threw it away:-)
The Return of Zorro…love it!
Thank you so much 😀
Love it! Riding off into the sunset, Happily Ever After. 🙂
Thank you so much Shandra:-)
A happy ending for the bride! Not so much for the groom. True love prevails. Love this.
Ha!ha!So true-poor chap!Thank you so much 🙂
So romantic! I love it.
Thank you Alice 🙂
I picture someone like Zorro coming to her rescue. No wonder she loved him.
You are spot on Russel! :-)Thanks so much for stopping by 🙂
Ha!ha!Thank you Russel-you got it right Padner 😉
It’s amazingly written . So crisp and so clear . Could imagine the scene very well relating to the movies of 80’s and 90’s that we saw in our childhood days 🙂
Thanks for visiting my blog and for your lovely comment 🙂
Ha!ha!You are so right-anyone who has seen a Bollywood movie then would relate to it -thanks for the return visit Sushree 🙂
Atreyee
Cool story! Mother India & several other Bollywood movies scene 🙂
So glad she didn’t have the poison…
You are so right Anita ;-)Glad you liked it!
Great story – reminiscent of an old Silent Film Classic – “Son of the Sheik”. Great interpretation of the photo, Atreyee.
Thank you Joanne-never heard of this movie,let alone watch it-but will see if it can be found online:-)
A happy ending! Now that is definitely a twist in the tale when it comes to FF! 🙂
Lol,so true-specially from the likes of me-I think I am losing my wicked touch 😉 Thank you so much for stopping by to read and comment